Talk:Heritage
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Hey all! Feel free to tell me what you think.
Aurrasingrules101 22:22, 24 July 2008 (UTC)Aurra
- I (finally) read your entire story, all in a day. I couldn't put it down, and while there were parts that I didn't like, the story as a whole kept my attention riveted. I liked the ending overall, and while I can't compare it to the canonical NJO since that's 22 novels and this is one, I liked this much better than, say, the Dark Nest series. It had a good plot, a mostly engaging villain, and good characterizations of a number of OT and EU characters. I thought you did a particularly good job of handling *ahem* sensitive issues with good taste and the appropriate amount of discretion—your restraint in resisting the urge to titillate or resort to grotesque imagery is admirable. I liked the various EU tie-ins and homages to various other Star Wars works, and the way you brought in all the different characters was overall nice-I had my favorites and least favorites, but nice job overall. Correct me if I'm wrong, but the Baci seemed to be based off of some early concepts for the Yuuzhan Vong. However, I still miss LANDO.
You can't have a good epic EU novel without the smoothest gambler in the galaxy, IMO, but the work doesn't suffer (much) from his absence. A few minor quibbles: it needs to be line-by-line read over again—in particular, there are some small copyedits that could be done. For example, and I'm guessing this is a holdover from TFN, there's some unusual coding that I suppose is supposed to be for italicizing. You might run a search for that using Ctrl+F in Firefox. Another thing is that I had no problems following all the EU characters and places and ships and stuff, because I browse and edit Wookieepedia on a regular basis—an EU junkie, if you will. However, for less informed readers, some areas, particularly when introducing lesser known characters (Cilghal, for one, or Tycho), a paragraph or two on their history and appearance wouldn't be out of place. The villain was, well, he wasn't as interesting as he could have been, as it seemed his background and character were sort of skimmed over and not delved into. Perhaps that was intentional. Overall, though, this story is riveting despite my minor complaints and dislikes of some parts, I was impressed with its quality and flow. I tried to make mostly technical commentaries and refrained from all but the most general comments on the story itself—I can do that if you want. On the other hand, if you're willing to put a good copyedit (read through and make small edits to fix grammar and such), I'd be happy to nominate this for Star Wars Fanon's first featured work. Atarumaster88 
(Talk page) 04:42, 21 October 2008 (UTC)
- I was waiting for a response, but since you've not been available to check it, I've gone ahead and nominated it for featured work. You can see the nomination page by following the link on the FWnomination template on actual page. Feel free to change the excerpt or remove the nom at your discretion. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 22:12, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
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